http://survivingenglish101.blogspot.com/2009/11/lesson-13-revising-tips-continued-yet.html
When I sit down to starting writing my assignment I brainstorm. Usually I just make a list of the ideas that I have that are matching the assignment, research them if necessary, then pick the best one that I can write a lot about and feel strongly about. Once I figure out every point in my paper I figure out how I'm going to order them. I usually start with the body, to the conclusion, and then figure out my introduction paragraph. If I start at the introduction than I sit there for forever trying to figure out what I should say and how I should say it. I always have a hard time with the introduction and conclusion of any paper that I write. For some reason I make them harder than they have to be but if I stay with my method of the body first then the other two last I'm usually good to go and just have to do some minor editing. When I am all finish with the brainstorming and writing portion of the essay I read it out loud to myself first, then to my husband that way I can find different things each time that I need to change so it's better. After this part of the revision is done, if I have the time before the essay is due I'll e-mail it to one of my friends and she'll help me with the grammar and spelling aspect if I need it. I think it's always important to revise, either its me reading it out loud to myself, my husband, or sending it to a friend for help. I'm not a professional writer at all and extra input is always nice!!
I love having someone else read my paper because what makes since to me doesn't always make since to others. When I write my paper I want it to say something specific and when I read it I know what it's supposed to say. So when I have someone else read it I just give it to them and see what they think that it's about without saying anything at all. If it doesn't make since to them then I go back and make it make since. I always try to edit it to what others say it might or might not need. Now if I don't agree with what they have to say then I will leave it the way that is because sometimes me as the writer I need to make sure that it's MY voice that the reader is hearing and not someone elses'.
I love to write even if it isn't always something that I want to write about. I try to make it my voice that's being heard even when I have a lot of peoples help on the paper that way the reader knows that it's me and no one else that they are hearing from. I love it when people read my papers and like them, it makes me feel like the process that I do and the steps that I take are making a huge difference in my writing and helping me to become even better at it.
Friday, September 30, 2011
Sunday, September 25, 2011
Frankenstein
“I had desired it with an ardour that far exceeded moderation; but now that I had finished, the beauty of the dream vanished, and breathless horror and disgust filled my heart.” (Frankenstein, pg 34) To me these words stuck out very strong. It shows us how Victor wanted with all of his heart to be the first one to create such a creature. He found a secret that no other scientist had found and was so excited about it. “I became myself capable of bestowing animation upon lifeless matter” (Frankenstein, pg 30).
The beginning of the book talks about how Victor is obsessed with an aurthor by the name of Heinrich Cornelius Agrippa who wrote De Occulta Philosophia (1531) and was also a magician. Agrippa wrote of the supernatural things such as the Philosophers Stone and the elixir of life. Victor began to want to put life into something that he created in the beginning, but after his research he discovered that “Pursuing these reflections, I thought, that if I could bestow animation upon lifeless matter, I might in process of time (although I now found it impossible) renew life where death had apparently devoted the body of corruption.” (Frankenstein pg 32) Victor had lost his mother right before he left to attend the University and as he studied all of life and death he wanted so much to bring her back to life or stop the process of death like with the elixir of life.
These show us how this novel will continue, with pain, suffering, learning, and more suffering. He finally gave life to something that was lifeless to only find horror in what he had created. Once the creature opened his eyes Victor was in shock and ran away. He has what I think of as a “mothers” remorse, since he himself had created this creature in which his despises, he states this to Robert with this, “catching and fearing with each sound as if it were to announce the approach of the demoniacal corpse to which I had so miserably given life.” (Frankenstein pg 35) Victor has so much remorse for what he had created when in the beginning he had so much happiness in creating it. From here on out Victors destiny is laid out before him with his constant battle of his creation and humanity.
Thursday, September 15, 2011
Essay #2-"Goblin Market"
“Goblin Market” By Christina Rossetti
After rereading through all of the poems that we were given I landed on the “Goblin Market” for my essay. After reading it for the second time, something more popped out at me that didn’t the first time through. The poem is a way to teach the reader to avoid temptation, but also teaches us about love and loyalty.
The story of this poem is about two sisters, Lizzie and Laura, who in the beginning are both tempted by the goblins who are selling their goods. The goblins use many magical words to get the girls to come buy their goods such as “Plump unpeck'd cherries,” (Rossetti line 7). This puts the image of big, red, luscious cherries in the girls’ minds so they want to come down and buy them. All the images that the goblins paint in the girls’ heads are of the many types of fruits that are rich and colorful. This use of imagery also makes us, the reader, picture the fruit and make our own mouth water as we read what the goblins say. All day, every day, in the sunshine or bad weather, the goblins are out there, placing these images into peoples head in the hopes that they will lure at least one person into buying their forbidden fruit. Just like in the Garden of Eden, how the fruit looked so delicious to Eve, this fruit looks the same to Laura and Lizzie. Both fruits are spotless, perfect, the most amazing thing that they have to have, yet the most dangerously tempting, it’s forbidden.
Even though the two sisters are very close, they are completely apart. Lizzie is wise, whereas Laura is willing. Laura knows that these goblins wish to trick them,
"We must not look at goblin men,
We must not buy their fruits:
Who knows upon what soil they fed
Their hungry thirsty roots?" (Rossetti, lines 42-45). Yet she wishes to view the mysterious goblin men who are selling these illicit fruits that she so desires to have. Lizzie chooses to neither look at the little goblin men nor listen to their dangerous words. "Oh," cried Lizzie, "Laura, Laura,
You should not peep at goblin men."
Lizzie cover'd up her eyes,” (Rossetti, lines 48-50). You can hear the disappointment in Lizzie’s voice by the tone that Rossetti used in writing those lines.
Rossetti describes the goblin men in a way that you as the reader are able to see them in your imaginary eye. “One had a cat's face,
One whisk'd a tail,
One tramp'd at a rat's pace,
One crawl'd like a snail,
One like a wombat prowl'd obtuse and furry,
One like a ratel tumbled hurry skurry.
She heard a voice like voice of doves” (lines 71-77). These place the images of the goblin men of how scary they are yet tempting because the girls have never seen anything like them before. Laura’s resistance grows weaker and weaker with every line Rossetti writes, and she finally gives in. “Like a vessel at the launch
When its last restraint is gone” (lines 85-86). The goblins realize that she is a much easier target for the temptation than her sister Lizzie is, so they focus their intentions onto her. Once approached, she is offered their fruit, but for a price. She has no means of money, no gold in her purse, nor silver either, but they do not care for she has the golden hair. They offer her a trade in which they hope she cannot resist, a piece of their fruit for a lock of her golden curls. Her hair represented her innocence, and when she cut it to get the fruit by which she was drawn, she shed just one precious tear which Rossetti compared to a pearl. Once she gets the fruit she dives in to devour it. “She suck'd until her lips were sore;
And knew not was it night or day
As she turn'd home alone” (lines 136, 139, 140). She then got up, and made her return journey home.
When she returns home Lizzie is waiting for her but not without a warning. She asks her if she remembers their friend Jeanie, her sister replies that she does but basically blows it off as if to say that that same thing won’t happen to her. Laura tells Lizzie the next day on their normal routine that she will go find the goblin men again, buy more fruit, and this time bring them home to Lizzie so she too can taste the amazing fruit. “Listening ever, but not catching
The customary cry,
"Come buy, come buy," (lines 230-232). Laura was not able to hear the goblins rhyme to come buy the dangerous fruit because she had already fallen to their temptations, but Lizzie was able to hear them still. Laura is almost upset at the fact that her sister can still hear the calls where as she can’t. She fears that she’s going deaf or blind, but decided to go to bed with Lizzie and wait until she falls asleep before she gets up again to cry so her sister does not hear her heart break. “And gnash'd her teeth for baulk'd desire, and wept
As if her heart would break” (lines 267-268), you can feel her sadness with the imagery pouring out of these words.
“Tender Lizzie could not bear
To watch her sister's cankerous care” (lines 299-300) you can feel how sorry Lizzie is for her sister and knows that she must do something if she wants to save her from dying too young. This is where the love and loyalty comes into play in the poem. Lizzie braves going down to the goblin men to buy their forbidden fruit so her sister may have some and life longer. What she doesn’t intend on is the fact that the goblin men want her to eat their fruit with them, and when she refuses they attack her. After the attack, she went back home with everything that was smashed against her to give to her sister. “Come and kiss me.
Never mind my bruises,
Hug me, kiss me, suck my juices,” (lines 466-468) these lines made me smile because I could feel Lizzie’s happiness radiating from them. She had done it, she got the fruit her sister had wanted so dearly without eating it herself. Laura licked Lizzie from head to foot getting all the fruit and its juices off.
This poem is a great read. Rossetti used enchanted words to make the story pop from the writing without losing the reader. My favorite line, the line in which ties the whole thing together is this, “For there is no friend like a sister
In calm or stormy weather;
To cheer one on the tedious way,
To fetch one if one goes astray,
To lift one if one totters down,
To strengthen whilst one stands." (lines 562-567). Rossetti used the whole poem, the temptation, Laura giving in, Lizzie going to save her, and their undying sisterly love for each other to write these lines to tie the whole poem together. It’s a perfect conclusion to a great a story. Work Cited
Rossetti, Christina. "BlackBoard ." University of Toronto . Fisher Rare Book
Library, 1997. Web. 15 Sept. 2011. <https://lbblackboard.yc.edu/webapps/ portal/frameset.jsp?tab_tab_group_id=_2_1&url=%2Fwebapps%2Fblackboard%2Fexecute%2Flauncher%3Ftype%3DCourse%26id%3D_38701_1%26url%3D>.
Questions that I need help with: After rereading the essay it seems to make since to me but at the same time seems really long, if you could look at it and see if there's anything I could take out and get away with that would be great! Also, I'm horrible at the introduction paragraph and the conclusion paragraphs, some tips on those would be great!! Thanks!!
Wednesday, September 7, 2011
Fair-tale Logic By A.E. Stallings.
Looking through these poems to pick one that I had a strong reaction to and to write about it was pretty hard. Finally I was able to read, understand, and feel about the poem “Fairy-tale Logic” by A.E. Stallings. Fairy-tales have always been something that I love. When you’re a kid it helps you to use our imaginations and be creative. This poem is very essay for me to read and I loved that about it. It’s hard for me to understand and relate to a poem if I can’t really understand the wording. “Fairy tales are full of impossible tasks:” (Stallings, Line 1) states it perfectly to me that fairy-tales are to have us use our imagination to do the tasks that are given. The poem isn’t just talking about fair-tales either, it’s showing me that there’s a lesson in them when we read them as a kid. Take the first line in the second stanza, “You have to fight magic with magic. You have to believe” (Stallings), that’s putting the image in my head that in order to do what we want to do we have to BELIEVE that we can do it. If we don’t believe then there’s really no point in trying to do it. “The will to do whatever must be done:” (2nd stanza, line 5 Stallings) also shows that you must have the will do to whatever it is that you have to do or want to do. This poem touches on a lot of basis for me, not only to use my imagination but to have the believe and will power to do whatever is that I want to do. I know that I want to teach my children that just like my parents taught me and I’ll probably use fair-tales to show them too. I never looked at fairy-tales as a lesson to be learned from until I read this poem. Everything is out there to teach us some form of a lesson.
Work Cited
Stallings, A.E. “Fairy-tale Logic”. Poetry. March 2010, Web. Sept 7 2011.
Picture--http://fairytalenewsblog.blogspot.com/2009/08/new-look-same-once-upon-blog.html
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